ZEEKA CHRONICLES WRITTEN BY BRENDA MOHAMMED TOO AMBITIOUS

 

I submitted my written pitch for a screenplay for Zeeka Chronicles: Revenge of Zeeka, a five-series sci-fi thriller to a producer.

I was amazed at the nice things he said about it, but he passed on it as he was unclear how two characters related to the rest of the story. 

I did say that Janet married Dr. Raynor Sharpe, the protagonist's brother, Dr. Steven Sharpe. 

I also said that Mandy was the wife of Steven Sharpe, the protagonist.

Here is what he wrote:

Pitch Feedback:

"This was definitely one of the most unique pitches I've ever read! I love that the inspiration came from a real-life crisis and that Brenda has taken it in such an imaginative direction. I have to admit I found the episode summary a little difficult to follow. There were a few characters who appeared in the episodes who hadn't been described before (Janet, Mandy) and I was unclear how they were related to the rest of the story or what their motivations were. Like I said, this was one of the most imaginative pitches I've ever seen, but I think it's a little too ambitious for me! I wish Brenda good luck with it though because I think it would make an incredibly entertaining series!"

A pitch must not exceed two pages, and to expand on the pitch will take more than two pages.

TITLE: ZEEKA CHRONICLES: REVENGE OF ZEEKA

CREATED    BY:     Brenda Mohammed

FORMAT: One Hour          [serialized]    TV      Sci-Fi Thriller,          Dark          Fantasy

LOGLINE:    When 51 programmable zombies unleash chaos and death on spectators at a Carnival event on the tourist haven of Gosh Island, local police, detectives, and a doctor kidnapped by Zeeka as a child, must hunt down Master Zeeka before he kills again.                

COMPARISON:      Twilight Zone, Frankenstein, Shakespeare’s Plays.

WHY  THIS  STORY: The fictional futuristic sci-fi thriller is set in 2036 on an imaginary island, off the coast of South America, well-known for fabulous beaches, resorts, and annual Carnival celebrations. The story is purely the author’s imagination, inspired by the zika virus in 2016. Zombies and robots take centre stage and good triumphs over evil. 

SERIES        REGULARS:

Chief of Police Bill Grady [Master Zeeka]– Antagonist

Bill Grady is the Chief of Police on the island of Gosh.  Grady kidnapped Dr. Steven Sharpe when he was seven, changed his name, threatened to kill his family if he tried to escape, sent him to medical school, and used him to create a vaccine for pregnant women infected with the zika virus. Grady used the vaccine to create zombies in a revenge plot against the hospital because his wife was infected with the virus, died in childbirth, and his son was born with a brain deformity.

Dr. Jason Stephens a.k.a Dr. Steven Sharpe – Protagonist 

Dr. Jason Stephens is Dr. Steven Sharpe and the brother of Dr. Raynor Sharpe. He is a scientist who created a vaccine to prevent microcephaly from affecting the unborn babies in pregnant women infected with the zika virus, but was used for evil purposes by Grady who kidnapped him when he was seven years old, changed his name, and put him through medical school.  Police suspect Jason of being Master Zeeka, and he seeks to prove his innocence and true identity.

Dr. Raynor Sharpe – Lead Character

Raynor Sharpe is a gynaecologist at Gosh Hospital. He saw an army of zombies marching outside his beach-front home but no one took him seriously until the massacre at the carnival event. Raynor is the brother of Dr. Steven Sharpe but neither one knows it yet.

THE SERIES

Zeeka and the Zombies is series one in the five-series sci-fi thriller.  Dr. Raynor Sharpe sees zombies marching outside his beachfront home and they suddenly disappear. A zombie named Number Nine goes to Gosh Hospital to warn Dr. Brown about an impending massacre by his Master Zeeka. In February 2036, 51 programmable killer zombies disguised as a sailor band, unleash weapons at a Carnival event. One hundred and twenty-five people die, seventy-five are maimed for life, and all zombies disintegrate into ash. Police are not clear if Number Nine died in the shoot-out. A manhunt begins for Master Zeeka. Intertwined in this episode is a love story between Dr. Raynor Sharpe and Dr. Janet Jones who marry.

 Zeeka's Child is the second series in the five-series sci-fi thriller. While police are searching for Dr. Jason Stephens, Detective Jack Wildy discovers a flash drive revealing the face of the real perpetrator, Chief of Police Bill Grady. Dr. Jason Stephens gives another flash drive to Janet to deliver to Dr, Raynor Sharpe, confirming Wildy’s discovery, and about the child Master Zeeka [ Grady] kidnapped forty years ago. Raynor and Steven reunite as brothers. Police find evidence of nine flesh-eating zombies in Grady’s basement and start a manhunt for him and the nine zombies.

Zeeka Returns is the third series in the five-series sci-fi thriller. Zeeka [ Grady] abandons his zombies in the forest and goes to the home of Dr. Raynor Sharpe to look for Steven Sharpe. Janet’s helper, Miranda, a beautiful robot, uses her taekwondo skills to capture Zeeka when she sees him holding a gun. The police shrink zombies and demolish them with high-tech weapons found in Grady’s bag. They slap Grady with more than 200 charges to which he confesses. He asks to see Steven and tells him why he committed the crimes. He begs Steven for forgiveness for kidnapping him as a child, and Steven refuses. When Steven leaves, Grady commits suicide.

Zeeka's Ghost is the fourth series in the five-series sci-fi thriller. A strong wind throws down Zeeka’s urn. it falls and breaks into pieces, his ashes scatter in Steven’s study, and Zeeka’s ghost appears to Steven. The ghost begs Steven for forgiveness and he again refuses. However, the ghost saves Mandy, Steven’s wife, from dangerous kidnappers and Steven forgives him. Zeeka leaves the world in peace.

Resurrection is the fifth series in the five-series sci-fi thriller.  Number Nine, the zombie, who police thought was dead in the massacre at the Carnival event in February 2036 is alive. Mandy's robot helper, Eve, encounters him in the backyard, records the conversation on her security device, and plays it for Steven. Number Nine collapses in the backyard with an epileptic fit, and Eve alerts the Gosh hospital. Tests and records confirm he is Number Nine, he is not a zombie and is the biological son of Bill Grady – Master Zeeka, who made him grow up with zombies because he was misdiagnosed with microcephaly- a disease associated with the zika virus that infected his mother who died in childbirth 22 years ago.  Raynor helps Number Nine choose Nieman Grady as his legal name, and Steven cures him of his brain ailment, Craniosynostosis, with his new invention CrainX.  Steven is the new hero in Gosh because his miracle cures and inventions replace Carnival Tourism with Medical Tourism.      

I am at a loss as to what I should do to get an agent to ask for my script to read it.

Zeeka Chronicles: Revenge of Zeeka is a futuristic sci-fi thriller set in  2036, and time is running out before it is no longer futuristic.

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